Bird Piche, 24, remains in hospital, but her condition is ‘trending in the right direction’ following the incident in Buffalo, New York, on April 30
  • catloaf@lemm.eeEnglish
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    9 months ago

    By the rules, yes, but OP’s is much better. I hate the style of the actual headline. Just state the facts of the article, there’s no need to frame everything like a human interest story.